Date of publication: 2017-08-25 12:50
When I moved from Long Beach, CA to Philadelphia, PA in the seventh grade, I encountered an environment far different from the one I had become accustomed to. In Long Beach, every day was a struggle for survival. By the age of nine, I had witnessed the death of my mother and one of my best friends g.
SEPHORA, Natasha said she would show me her booger but it was just mud and water and I just don t think that s fair and she s being really mean and I need he.
Each weekend, I teach karate to kids ages 8-67. As I show the Little Ninjas how to position their hands to do a clean shoulder roll, or I help the Tigers break down a tricky section of the Two-Man Bo Staff form, any frustration or tiredness I might have felt before ente.
I liked the passion you convey in this sentence, but you need to maintain a formal, almost reserved voice in academic writing. See my suggestion for alternative wording that does a better job of capturing your experience and of demonstrating how that experience has influenced your decision to seek an advanced degree.
I m a fifth generation Californian who s picked up a few of the habits of the region, among them surfing and computer programming. What does this mean? Having a foot in both worlds gives me a sense of balance and perspective. Beyond that, surfing has influenced my software coding and future.
This sentence does not tell the reader enough about your experience. Whenever you write, be sure that a reader who is unfamiliar with your accomplishments will understand the subject, object, and action of each sentence.
These five points are very general but almost every university wants to know about them. They may be too general but if you miss one of them you are probably missing something important.
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